This story was written for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by wonderful writer, Rochelle, on her website, Addicted to Purple. Each week, she provides us with a photo prompt and her own story, and we have 100 words to respond with out take. Anyone is welcome to participate–just give credit to the provider of the photo prompt (provided this week by Roger Bultot), write your own story, and click on the blue frog below to read others’ work and add a link to your own.
Revised Edition Pending
(100 words)
There he goes again, telling my story, and telling it wrong:
How he saved a woman from a brutal murder.
Not quite.
I found out where she was. When I broke into his basement, she escaped. He killed me, claiming self-defense, that I’d come after them both.
I was a quiet man, with few friends. People believed his version.
I’m not so quiet now, though. I make a hell of a lot of noise in his diner and his house. I’m still learning the ways of this misty world, but I’ll tell the story my own way before the end.
Oh, a bit of a ghost story, this. Revenge is sweet.
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Yes, I think he will enjoy it!
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I’m guessing sooner or later the real killer will snap and confess, just to make it all stop. Nice one!
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Could be that that’s how the story will get told! I certainly think the ghost isn’t giving up. Thanks!
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I’m not usually a fan of ghosts but I liked this one
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Thanks, Neil! I’ll take that compliment : )
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Yes I liked this, especially the description of a “misty world”
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Thank you!
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Great story Emily 🙂
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Thanks, Iain!
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Karma’s a bitch, huh? I’m interested to see how you’ll revise it because I thought this one was pretty good.
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Thanks! I thought maybe this title isn’t the best. I’m not revising, but my protagonist is planning to have the revised, true story come out.
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Really liked your story. I hope the ghost gets his revenge. I imagine bouncing around a diner must make quite a racket.
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Thanks, Sarah Ann! I think he is a definite nuisance in this diner, and I’m sure he scares that guy in particular, once everyone’s gone!
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Love that first line, it really drew me into your story. I enjoyed this creative take on the prompt.
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Thank you!
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Great story. I hope he causes mayhem in the diner!
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Thanks, Clare! I think he definitely does!
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I think he will move from being a nuisance to get redemption…
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I think so, too. I think he’s just waiting for his opportunity.
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Dear Emily,
I really love your title. If the reader is paying attention it really adds a lot to the story. Eternal revenge is sweet. Good job!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle! Makes me feel more secure about my title choice! : ) I had fun with this one.
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